Logline: On a boring afternoon, three friends go on a shopping trip that may result in the end of a friendship.
Act I
Maia, Amity, and Chester became really good friends after being kidnapped by a high school classmate. This boring afternoon, Amity decides to call up her friends to invite them to the mall. The story begins as they enter their favorite shop, Finally 22.
Act II
Maia and Amity decide to look for a gift for Chester since his birthday was coming up. They both search the rack when they find the "perfect" shirt. Maia and Amity excitedly run towards the cash register to buy the shirt when they look towards each other and realize that they were holding the exact same shirt, but in a different shade of blue.
Act III
Both girls upset that the other chose the same shirt, began to bicker back and forth claiming that their shade of blue is better. Chester finally comes to break the fight up. He breaks the news and tells them that his birthday was last month and his favorite color is not blue, but gray.
I enjoyed your story and the plot twist at the end. My favorite part was when you named the shop Finally 22. The storyline fit the girl characters very well and Chester's reply was funny. I look forward to this promising story.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for your critique!
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